Saturday, February 4, 2012

Untitled has a new Title!

After a year I have finally come up with a title that is mutually agreeable to both me and my editor/story muse. Ebonywahine sent me a suggestion and I have decided on a variation of it. Several people sent suggestions that I really liked but 'The Muse' is very decisive where this story is concerned (and rightfully so) and so it is with supreme joy that I announce the new name...

A Seal Upon Your Heart

Thank you Ebonywahine for your thesis title suggestion, 'Set me as a seal upon your heart' (I'm going to give you acknowledgments in the book for the title)

I'd like to share my story pitch which appears in the contest and will also be the product description when I self publish the story:

Jane used to have a different name, a different life—but that was before she was rescued from the refugee camp after the Rwandan genocide and brought to the convent to be raised. Now she is being dismissed, told to go out into the world. But how does she do that when all she knows is the convent?
Sometimes she wants to scream, I am a child of Africa! And sometimes she wants to dream about a love that will save her from her loneliness…but mostly she wants to fit in.

Tim Singleton lost his wife to breast cancer less than a year ago and yet the pain and anger is still fresh in his mind. He hates the sympathetic looks from his colleagues and tolerates the invitations from friends with their good intentions. When Corrine died, so did Tim’s faith…so when he received the call from the convent that his wife had focused her charitable endeavors to, Tim isn’t quite sure why he agreed to help the young African girl with a job.

She didn’t quite fit in with the others at the law firm; that wore thousand dollar Chanel suits while her clothes were picked with care from the donation bin at the church.  At nearly six feet tall, the shy girl tried to become invisible in the hectic world around her. But if her ill-fitting clothes didn’t draw attention to her, then it was a beauty that couldn’t be hidden so easily. 

Soon Jane sees Tim as not only her benefactor, but her one true love. But can Tim finally open up and allow someone else to touch his heart? Can he forget their difference in race and age? And more importantly, would being with him mean the loss of her innocence?

Again, that is the pitch used for the writing contest. Unfortunately I won't be eligible to win the entire contest because although I submitted the story in wasn't exactly complete. Bah, they allow you to edit as the contest progresses but as soon as they hit the submission deadline or reach 5K submissions then the editing is cut off. So...there is a chance that they might think it ended where I craftily stopped writing--but with the lose ends dangling beneath the proverbial slip, I don't see where it could win.

But on the plus side, you are voted on more than just the overall story, but also the pitch. And I really like mine, so maybe it will get noticed. But it will take several months to know anything so in the meantime I will be self publishing it sometime in the not-so-distant future. But currently chapter 1 has been submitted to Literotica and as I promised, I will be posting it here for you guys to preview before anyone else gets it--well other than the Library of Congress and The Muse (smile)


  1. Thank you and I love your title for this story.

  2. Dear Pep, I would be honored if you do indeed end up using that title. I wish you could have seen the performance piece that was at the center of my had live music, interactive video, and the real aromas of chocolate cake, freshly brewed espresso coffee and ripe oranges filled the performance space. I think you would have enjoyed it. Anyway I am just glad I could be of some assistance to one of my fave writers!


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