Drum roll please...(I'm so freaking dramatic). After careful consideration, and reading every one of your comments, I've decided that Beast gets a slight make-over. I probably won't change chapter 12 much. But it's getting to chapter 12 that has to change.
It is true that I didn't develop their relationship as well as I could have...which makes having a baby, and being engaged feel so quick. I do agree with those that say that a modernized fairy tale doesn't have to be written in the same way that a novel like WOS was written. And I don't want to do anything like that again!!!
So think about the actual Beauty and the Beast Fairytale.
-Beast is not a good person due to the issue of looks.
-Beast evolves because of the love for Beauty
-The Beast's castle (subbasement) was a sanctuary and then w/o Beauty, a prison
-Once Beauty has to leave (Recall that I have switched the rolls. Christopher is beauty and Ashleigh is the beast) Beast is at deaths door without Beauty
-Beauty returns and saves the beast...the beast becomes beautiful on the outside as they ever was in the inside.
My change is that Christopher being already 'Beauty' didn't have to become beautiful on the outside. But it was a change that tied in to his final confrontations (I won't say, but you could probably figure out the two figures he has yet to confront) And besides...don't you guys think that if I am writing a fairtytale I should write Christopher transformed into a beautiful man on the outside as well? In this, I am like his fairy god mother. smiles.
And yes yes yes, I will address his Commander and The Marines and Ashleigh's family. I just need to tweak...
which means that there isn't going to be a Friday post. I don't know when, either. Just going to plod along until it's satisfactory to me.
*Dashes away very fast.*
Yay! I'm excited. Well I'll be waiting as patiently as I can. I'm glad about both of their transformations.
ReplyDeleteAlso just to note fairy tales don't have a specific length their not supposed to strictly be short tales. That's a fable. Fairytales have a formula but not a length requirement.
ReplyDeleteIt's your choice. HOWEVER lol I am a bit peeved we're not going to see this story driven to conclusion faster.
ReplyDeleteAlso, actually fairy tales were meant to be short stories with highly unlikely endings. Short stories are narratives that quickly come to a point after quick development of plot and character. Of course short stories can be further categorized by length, but no short story should be the length of a novel. Then it's just not a short story.
Total literature nerd here (obviously); who knows if these rules go out the window for erotica, although you'd think the framework would transcend genres.
Oh, and you know what would be awesome? A Blackberry app for Pep's stories. I'm so so serious. lol
ReplyDeleteOk, last comment I promise!
ReplyDeleteThe reason I like your writing Pep is because all of the drama with your characters reminds me of my favorite non-erotica author, Flannery O'Connor. She's the master of the short story and said these things:
"Whenever I’m asked why Southern writers particularly have a penchant for writing about freaks, I say it is because we are still able to recognize one."
and
"Writing a novel is a terrible experience, during which the hair often falls out and the teeth decay. I'm always irritated by people who imply that writing fiction is an escape from reality. It is a plunge into reality and it's very shocking to the system."
AND
"I use the grotesque the way I do because people are deaf and dumb and need help to see and hear."
....and other awesomeness.
Love the take!!!! I knew where you were going with your characters because you fleshed them out well. I saw the switch between Beauty & the Beast many times and it was perfect. I love when people adapt fairy tales into a wild ride. You my dear are doing a great job in bringing this tale to life.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad that you are going to take the time to re-do some parts of the story and I very much look forward to reading the end result!
ReplyDeleteStarry
I won't lie I'm disappointed, very disappointed with your decision but I understand.
ReplyDeleteThank you for listening and I hope that you know that I only said what I did as a personal opinion. If you had decided to continue as you were I would have continued being a faithful reader and huge fan. Whatever you decide for the revise I know that you will rock it.
ReplyDeleteI think I might cry even though I said stuff that favored tweaking some of the story.
ReplyDeleteI will not cry...I will not cry......
I have a flair for the dramatic.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
ReplyDeleteNo. No. No. No. No. Not Friday without Christopher! Okay. Well, could you at least leave the un-tweaked version as is? I rather like the story thus far.
ReplyDeleteBut but but this was the only thing that got me through my day :'(
ReplyDeleteWell I just want you to know you have ruined the happiest part of my day! So ummm when will I get the next part!?!? Please can it be soon! I'm so in love w/ this story! HURRY!!!!
ReplyDeleteAwwww man!!!! I was so looking forward to today's chapter.. I understood where you were going with the story. Hell, in real life if you're having sex even if you are using protection there's a chance of you getting pregnant.. Some people are just fortuante enough not to get caught fresh out the gate.
ReplyDeletePatiently waiting for the revised version.. Okay, I'm lying I won't be waiting patiently.. Will be on stalker patrol...
I think I was less upset the last time I was dumped by a guy...
ReplyDeleteI am waiting with bated breath Pepper. I know some were unhappy the way it was written but, I thought it was wonderful and cannot wait until chapter 13 is posted. I think this is one of my favorite stories. I found your writings through Literotica and someone happened to post after chapter 4 and listed this blog... after finding the blog I feel like my life is now complete. Please post soon!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys! I so appreciate your comments. I read everything even when I'm not commenting back and I listen even if I don't ultimately agree. And when I do agree I try to go in and make a change.
ReplyDeleteWith that said...the changes are FREAKING good. If you choose to read them they truly enhance the story. But...the story is still understood whether you decide to forge ahead.
I guess I'll begin posting the changes tonight. Thanks for sticking around while I tackle the edits!
Pep