I entered Beast. Only one story is allowed per author and based on a poll that was held here on the blog I decided that Beast was more marketable than Wheels of Steel (which would have been too long anyways.)
I wanted to share my pitch and description. The pitch is what the judges will be voting on to decide who will go to the next round. Feel free to give me any feedback. I can go in and alter my submission if I get feed back with helpful suggestions!
Description
Beast
by Kim Chambers
by Kim Chambers
This book is:
self-published
Description:
This funny, and sexy multicultural romance flips the script on the old Beauty and the Beast fairytale.
Ashleigh is a self confessed “Fluffy girl”; a BBW that likes nice things and isn’t afraid to pay for them—including a handsome boyfriend. But one day, when that handsome boyfriend marries another woman it causes Ashleigh to take a good luck at herself.
Wanting to attract a handsome man with her looks and not her money she decides to join the gym located in the subbasement of her office building. The only problem is that every morning there’s a man already there, constantly running the treadmill and wearing a hoodie that covers his face.
Despite her annoyance she can’t help but to admire his physical perfection. She knows that he is probably drop dead gorgeous…until one day she catches a glimpse of his shocking face.
Lt. Christopher Jameson; or Beast is a shy, lonely man leading a solitary life due to a congenital facial deformity. The nickname doesn’t bother him, he knows he’s ugly. He was told that he has a face for the Special Forces Unit that he’s a member of where he and his team of 16 Marines guard the employees of the Federal building.
Life for Christopher is just a series of missions, the monotony broken up by trips to the underground gym where he constantly trains for the next mission. But then enters the ‘pink’ lady. Well she’s not really pink—she’s actually brown and tan but she smells of pretty pink things. Why is she invading his space? He decides to flash her a glimpse of his face. That should get rid of her…only it doesn’t.
And now he's in more danger than a mission ever put him in, of opening up and allowing someone to get close.
Ashleigh is a self confessed “Fluffy girl”; a BBW that likes nice things and isn’t afraid to pay for them—including a handsome boyfriend. But one day, when that handsome boyfriend marries another woman it causes Ashleigh to take a good luck at herself.
Wanting to attract a handsome man with her looks and not her money she decides to join the gym located in the subbasement of her office building. The only problem is that every morning there’s a man already there, constantly running the treadmill and wearing a hoodie that covers his face.
Despite her annoyance she can’t help but to admire his physical perfection. She knows that he is probably drop dead gorgeous…until one day she catches a glimpse of his shocking face.
Lt. Christopher Jameson; or Beast is a shy, lonely man leading a solitary life due to a congenital facial deformity. The nickname doesn’t bother him, he knows he’s ugly. He was told that he has a face for the Special Forces Unit that he’s a member of where he and his team of 16 Marines guard the employees of the Federal building.
Life for Christopher is just a series of missions, the monotony broken up by trips to the underground gym where he constantly trains for the next mission. But then enters the ‘pink’ lady. Well she’s not really pink—she’s actually brown and tan but she smells of pretty pink things. Why is she invading his space? He decides to flash her a glimpse of his face. That should get rid of her…only it doesn’t.
And now he's in more danger than a mission ever put him in, of opening up and allowing someone to get close.
Pitch
This modern day adaptation of the fairytale Beauty and the
Beast flips the script on the original romance. Introducing cool and
independent Ashleigh; a self-confessed “fluffy girl”, a BBW that doesn’t mind
paying for nice things--including the attention of a handsome boyfriend.
It isn’t until her boyfriend marries another woman that deep-rooted
insecurities surface.
Determined to become a woman that looks good enough to
attract another fine guy, and this time with her looks and not just her money,
Ashleigh joins the gym in the subbasement of her company.
The problem is that each morning there’s a strange guy down
there always running the treadmill, his face covered by a black hoodie. Despite
her annoyance, she can’t stop peeking at his well-developed muscles and knows
that he must be gorgeous…that is until she glimpses his shocking face.
Lt. Christopher Jameson; Beast is a shy, lonely man leading
a solitary life due to a congenital facial deformity. The nickname doesn’t
bother him, he knows he’s ugly. He was told that he has a face for the Special
Forces Unit that he’s a member of where he and his team of 16 Marines guard the
employees of the Federal building.
Life for Christopher is just a series of missions, the
monotony broken up by trips to the underground gym where he constantly trains
for the next mission. But then enters the ‘pink’ lady. Well she’s not really
pink—she’s actually brown and tan but she smells of pretty pink things. Why is
she invading his space? He decides to flash her a glimpse of his face. That
should get rid of her…only it doesn’t.
And now Christopher is in danger of opening up which might
hurt him worse than any mission ever did.
This sexy fairytale proves that beauty is on the inside.
Well I didn't get the chance to read Beast before you published it...but your description makes me want to! It flows pretty well, just some grammar things that could be fixed. If you are interested in getting those critiques, just say so. :D
ReplyDeleteIs this available through your Amazon account for purchase? I may have to start buying up your stories if that's the only place I can see them lol.